Saturday, March 26, 2011

Sentences Shared: Loving Lisa

I wrote Loving Lisa--a very short story--in 2006. I rewrote it for this blog last Thursday.
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Aster played with her ring, examined their wedding picture. Had he broken a promise? Though she tried to ignore the question-it remained. It was stuck in her brain like a seed in her teeth. She'd noticed that sweet, young thing--Lisa--hanging on his every word, swallowing him up with her eyes. Where was he right now? Was he loving Lisa?
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12 comments:

Jessica Subject said...

I can really feel her emotions. Great six!

lexcade said...

Wow, that sucks for Aster. How sad :( Awesome six!

holessence said...

You paint a great word picture--I can see the scene in my mind's eye.

Sarah Grimm said...

Great, sad, six!

Marie Dees said...

Oh, I sense a conflict coming up.

Aislinn Kerry said...

Uh oh... Great lines. Poor Aster!

JoAnne Kenrick said...

fab six! I absolutely loved her bitterness, nicely done. "It was stuck in her brain like a seed in her teeth" fab line!

Jayel Kaye said...

That is a great picture of jealousy. Nice 6

Lauri J Owen said...

"Swallowing with her eyes" is a great line!

Laura Kaye said...

Compelling!

The Sweater Curse said...

Thank you all for your kind comments. A busy weekend prevented me from participating as much as I would have liked. I'll do better next weekend.

Lucy Felthouse said...

Brilliant six, well done :)